Friday, October 23, 2009

The Beginning

bright autumn leaves
takes me back
to that cool crisp day
as I watched you
so unaware
etching the perfect portrait
in my mind
of you
and the falling leaves
surrounding you
capturing a permanent
mental image
of being so in love..

15 comments:

  1. I am trying something new, so check out my first blog post for children http://mrscdbrown.blogspot.com/ I taught pre-school for 11 yrs before I went into special education and this was something I always wanted to do but never attempted. Feedback would be great. Thank to all. Love, Cindy

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  2. Poem is very nice Cindy :)
    'mental memory' -- just that i thought mental wasn't needed there,

    the other blog -- will be there for sure..just spare me some time :)

    wishes,
    devika

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  3. Devika, You are right, when I reread that mental was not needed. I was going for the image in my head, so i changed it. Tell me what you think, is that better or should I go back to memory and just drop the mental. Ha! I sound mental dont I ? Thanks so much, Love Cindy

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  4. A very sweet poem. Young love always makes the biggest impression on us, but mature love is the only kind likely to leave a LASTING impression :)

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  5. haha! you are so cute, Cindy...Some of them call me mental!

    mental image -- i think a 'permanent image' conveys its....that happens only in the mind...but then your choice of "permanent mental image"
    reinforces the idea...why i opted to take out mental was the very reason we said...something 'mental' there,

    But then thats just me, so it could remain as "mental image"...or could be "permanent image in the mind"?

    anyway, the poem is nice, Cindy:)

    wishes,
    devika

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  6. You've, to use forms of your word -etched a perfect portrait-. _m

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  7. I went and read the kid poem and loved it. I tried to comment on that page and it wouldn't let me. :(
    You should write a book of kid's poems and we'll figure out how to get it published. And then you can give me some money when you are rich. Love you!

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  8. Nice one. And you kids-project is a good idea.

    Best wishes
    Ralf

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  9. This is wonderful, Cindy. I love "taking pictures" in my mind...those never fade. :)

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  10. Cindy...you seem too busy...writing so less these days?? :)

    wishes,
    devika

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  11. Cindy...where have you been??? Miss you.

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  12. Cindy, where are you dear friend....so long, no news of you :)

    Hope you and all is well,

    love,
    devika

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  13. Cindy, Wish you and family a Very Happy New Year, dear :)

    Hope all is fine...not seen in you in a long while,

    wishes,
    devika

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